By Mehdi Karami, on 08 Nov 2014 22:08
[LOCKED] Nowadays, the number of organizations putting pressure on their staff to wear smart clothes at work are dramatically increased. There are found some principals believing it is essential for their organizations to have employees with attractive and smart appearance while others, value the quality of work much more. In this essay, we are going to scrutinize different aspects of the issue in details.
First of all, it is generally supposed in some occupations like business or banking, smart clothing could be considered as an effective advertisement leading to attract more and more customers. In fact, they tend to show their organization more prestigious by using smart and polite staff with good clothing as well as fantastic decoration. Furthermore, some one appreciating their clothes perfectly is generally thought to be more sensitive and responsible about clients' capital and order. Indeed, the worn clothes,could approximately prove their own personality in most cases.
The Second group is some kind of organizations which their shining future depends on their work quality and appearance dosen't have a key rule in their job , these groups mostly are teachers , doctors, etc.These jobs do not need the fashionable clothes, and no one cares about the appearance either.
Personally , I think having a good appearance increasing your self-confident and Individuals with high self-confidence can present high quality services to their customers , patients , etc. However, it is not reasonable to evaluate others just based on their clothes without regarding their functions.employees can change clothes in different occasions, they do not have to wear the same clothes in their whole working time.
In personal opinion, I think both of them, quality and appearance, are important and they should be combined with each other; however, each group has acceptable reasons for their opinion and they think that with their opinion
they could be more successful , and we can do nothing except respecting each group's believes.
Hi everybody. This isn't perfect. There are many grammatical and lexical (vocabulary) errors in it. Moreover, Siavash has no contribution to the development of this essay. Anyway, there are some wrong corrections:
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Thank you yashar after the number we always use singular verb and the orginal structure of' the clothes worn' was' the clothes which are worn' i deleted 'which are' To make the sentece complicated.
Thank you Mr Ansari for warning us about our mistakes .
I found some mistakes in different paragraphs too and I bold them in parantesses
Hi Yashar. You don't need to bold the mistakes. Look at the bottom of this page. After "Edit" is "History". Click on it then click on "Compare". This way you can compare your version with the last version. Good luck.
Hi guys please use appropriate punctuation and donot use informal words like guy in an formal essay.in addition, exploit sufficent linkers. Passive structures improve quility of the essay. Honestely i am terrible at spelling please correct if you find.
I think you should use (are) instead of (is) in last paragraph .
I myself had a mistake too , I should use (has) instead of (have) in last paragraph , second line .
Hi dudes. It is fantastic as your first experience of wiki writing but I recommend you to revise the essay several times. Yashar and Soheil initiated the task, but their job is not accomplished yet. The revisions by Soheil on yashar's initial text might not be correct. Where are Ali, Sina, and Siavash? Come on! revise and enrich the essay.